tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3498566586656538209.post9114346093761322456..comments2014-05-19T07:23:28.485-07:00Comments on Just a Bit of Rambling: (#Flash Friday) Going HomeEJ Hobbshttp://www.blogger.com/profile/07678857901520016380noreply@blogger.comBlogger6125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3498566586656538209.post-33263529867471551852012-11-10T13:40:08.216-08:002012-11-10T13:40:08.216-08:00the Idea here was this: the family turned zombie a...the Idea here was this: the family turned zombie and Brice(the father)had to kill them but not before being bit.I was trying to show the disease coursing through his veins, the feelings he was facing with the shorter segments.Going to flash backs, memories, in the longer ones.Showing his love for his family.in the end he ends his life ,instead of turning, to be with his family.I hope that helps, and thank you for the feed back,Steve.I know what works and what doesn't now.I'm glad at least a part of it was enjoyable,that the atmosphere was brought across. EJ Hobbshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07678857901520016380noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3498566586656538209.post-80663763124517988282012-11-10T13:29:10.398-08:002012-11-10T13:29:10.398-08:00I read this through several times, and I'm sti...I read this through several times, and I'm still not sure that I understand exactly what is going on.<br /><br />the writing is quite hypnotic, especially the shorter, staccato segments, (I really gel with that style), and overall is very magnetic.<br /><br />I have the overriding feeling of "something nasty" lurking, waiting for the family tragedy to happen so it can manifest itself.Steve Greenhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/18414279461366098783noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3498566586656538209.post-24436929542163646632012-11-10T08:06:08.604-08:002012-11-10T08:06:08.604-08:00Thank you for your input Alison.This is really jus...Thank you for your input Alison.This is really just a one off for Friday Flash, I try to experiment on these. I was afraid some of the points were glossed over.That it was somewhat unclear who was hurt, what was happening.I'm glad you could find some enjoyment in it though all things considered.EJ Hobbshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07678857901520016380noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3498566586656538209.post-40345094349244061002012-11-10T02:04:07.099-08:002012-11-10T02:04:07.099-08:00This was completely mesmerizing, I love the effect...This was completely mesmerizing, I love the effect of the short burst versus the more conventional storytelling, it created tension and anxiety and propelled me forward through the piece, heightened every emotion. Coming new to this piece it wasn't obvious that it was Bryce in the shorter pieces, I thought that there was some other dark force coming to shatter Bryce's normal life but maybe that's on first read or maybe we need a few more markers. Atmospherically its fantastic & I got a real feel for the characters. Anonymousnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3498566586656538209.post-11316312636441189182012-11-09T19:21:56.946-08:002012-11-09T19:21:56.946-08:00I was trying to get the internal emotion across,th...I was trying to get the internal emotion across,the flashes of thought or Brice.The life he lost.I'm still not sure how well I captured it, but its up now.EJ Hobbshttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07678857901520016380noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-3498566586656538209.post-14019310930432368952012-11-09T19:12:50.387-08:002012-11-09T19:12:50.387-08:00Nicely done—mixing horror with a literary feel!Nicely done—mixing horror with a literary feel!Larry Kollarhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08317037795075278427noreply@blogger.com